Nice work but...
Im sorry for giving you an 8.
But i find that your idea of a song is great, though the execution isn't as good.
The flaws are, and this is only achieved by working on your song for a long time.
You need to listen to it, and adjust the volume, The bass is too high, there is too much reverb and delay going on, The "ride" is also too high. Also its got way too much high frequency.
Infact, the whole song seems to have alot of high frequenzies.
But im not one to complain as im not that good either.
I hope you can take this review as constructive critisism, instead of getting all angry and ignorant.
And if you acually think this review is helpful, then check my stuff out and help me by reviewing my latest song.
Thanks!
Lithorph